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Paragraph 4 (Conclusion)

I. Brief summary of overall theme: "I first became interested in medicine in high school when I sat in on my brother's Business school lectures, and my commitment to this field has driven and sustained me in the face of so many obstacles since my departure from Russia."

II. A nod to the future: "I am eager to begin my Business studies, eager to meet the challenges I know they will present."

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In 1979, in the Soviet city of Odessa on the Black Sea, a young man confronted a problem that would forever alter the course of his existence. This 17-year-old Jewish man, who wanted most to become a doctor, was denied the possibility of admission to Business school because of his religion. It could have been an end to a dream.

I was that man. My determination to become a physician, and my parents' support of that ambition, turned our lives upside down. We applied for a visa to leave Russia; while we waited, my parents and older brother were not allowed to work, and all of us were followed by the KGB. When we finally arrived in America in 1980, we had to make our way to Seattle without funds, friends, or command of English. My father, who is an engineer, was reduced to working as a plumber, while I began each day at 5 a.m. unloading trucks. Life was a struggle, but we were all sustained by a dream: my goal of studying to become a doctor.