Admissions Essay Conclusions - Continued

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College Essay Introductions and Conclusions:

Introductions | Conclusions

One way to add a strong sense of closure is to invoke your introduction in the process of synthesizing. There are a number of different ways this could be accomplished. You might complete a story you started in the introduction, or you might show how something has changed in your present since the timeframe of the introduction.

One applicant used his essay to relate personal characteristics through a child’s toy, Lego building blocks. He does not involve any overstatement about how Legos have dramatically changed his life. Instead, he uses his unique theme to showcase how he has become a mature young man—and a strong college applicant:

“Legos may not have changed the world the way the airplane and the computer have, but for one little boy, they accomplished what no incredible piece of technology could do. They released an unstoppable flow of imagination and curiosity that has shaped the boy into a creative, energetic, and confident young man.”

Expand on Broader Significance

One way to ensure that your last paragraph has something fresh to say is to tie your ideas to some broader implications, whether about yourself or your field. However, do not get carried away: Some applicants think they have to make reference to saving the world or derive some grand philosophical truths from their experiences. Stay grounded and focused on your personal details, as this applicant does:

“I cautiously placed my Star of David necklace around my neck as I once again boarded a plane to leave for Jonquiere, Quebec. For the following six weeks, I studied in a country where few people knew of the Jewish religion, and where those who looked at my necklace noticed it only for its beauty. Classmates in my courses knew of Judaism solely through stereotypes from television. For many, I was the first Jew they had met. I spoke less of my faith as a Jew, yet noticed its impact on me more. My necklace was my identity. I pulled it from underneath my shirt and placed it on the outside of my clothing, not caring if the diamond side faced forward.”