Admissions Essay Conclusions - Continued

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Law School Essay Introductions and Conclusions:

Avoid Adding Entirely New Information, Except to Look Ahead

We have used the word “fresh” several times here, but this is not an invitation to insert whole new experiences into the conclusion. The notion of freshness applies to perspectives and ideas, but you should avoid adding entirely new information in the conclusion. In shorter essays, you might have to pack details in everywhere, but in general, if it is an important experience, it should come earlier.

That said, speaking of goals in your conclusion is a strong way to end. Some essays will be chiefly about the writers’ qualifications and intentions, but they will not touch on specific goals until all of that has been established. The delineation of goals can be like a process of synthesizing, because you are trying to tie your themes together in the context of where you will go next.

This applicant closes by emphasizing how important music is in his life and by relating that he wants to share his gift with others. The essay has been building toward such a conclusion, so it is fitting:

“I hope to continue performing and studying music after high school. One of my band members met Sean Lennon last week while in the Village and said that Sean was very interested in hearing the demo we will be finishing in late November. Just the opportunity to present my music to a larger audience makes me realize how deeply I want to share the positive experience music has been in my life. Every time I make a new film, DJ a radio show, or record music with my band, I hope to promulgate music that will inspire other people to listen closely to the music that surrounds and impacts their lives.”

You may also want to make reference to the specific schools to which you are applying (some questions will ask why you want to attend). This information can come earlier, but it is not unacceptable to bring it up in the conclusion.